Tuesday, August 9, 2011

What do you think of my prologue?

Too much information! I felt like I needed to take notes! You gotta spread it out or condense some of the tragedies or something. One other point and it is just picky me, but one writing teacher pointed this out to me many years ago and so it always sticks out when I see it in someone elses work. Never use the same word twice in a sentence. You have lead up there a couple of times in one. And as always LESS is more. Go over your beginning sentences and be ruthless. A lot of those facts you can find a way to shove in later with other devices like finding old papers or talking to neighbors. I am uming that you are leading up to someone moving in there again? On the plus side I have to say this, of all the writing I have gone thru since I have found this site you seem the most prepared for your story. One rule of thumb is that if someone asks you what brand of toothpaste your hero uses you can tell them. You may never have to use that fact but you need to know your people and places that well. Just keep working on it, you should do great.

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